TO+BE+REVEALED

You've written a paragraph. It's probably a good paragraph; perhaps it could be better.

Let's play around with revision for an online audience As a class let's discuss both what your group learned about the "process" you described and what you DID in your own editing.
 * look at the first pages of the //Yahoo Style Guide.//
 * discuss as a group the ways in which your paragraph could be reworked, specifically to "get to the point," "make it easy to scan," and "write for the world". (Notice the the Yahoo guide tries to implement some of these features in a print book. We should talk about why they do that at some point and whether you think it works).
 * commit your group edits to the wiki