Wk3-Thurs

Folks, we won't meet in class but I am hoping you can make some progress on your mock-homepage by collaborating with two peers online. This is less than ideal, but perhaps it will be an interesting experiment?

For homework, you read the Yahoo chapter on how to Shorten and Strengthen Sentences. Three overarching principles were:
 * Shortening**
 * 1) Replace superfluous phrases
 * 2) Start strong, stay strong
 * 3) Clear out deadwood

As an editing activity, I would like you share your current edited draft, take comments from two peers, and then make a further edit. Since we won't be in the classroom to collaborate and share links, I think it will be easiest if we follow this process:

1.) Paste the text of the latest copy of your mock-webpage here:
Student-Mock-Webpages

include component="page" wikiName="iupengl360" page="Student-Mock-Webpages" title="Student-Mock-Webpages" editable="1"

2.) Visit and leave comments on the pages of two classmates.
//Remember how we did that with this example Commented-page-IUPBA?//
 * 1) //You go into edit mode,//
 * 2) //highlight a passage,//
 * 3) //click "comment" and write your observation,//
 * 4) //then finally save it.//

Please try to offer edits that follow along with the emphasis of the Yahoo chapter. You should basically identify places where the sentences can be more short and concise; where they use cliches, etc.

Homework:
Next week we will move from "mock-homepages" to developing a real newsletter. Think about a concept or group that needs a newsletter. Ideally this will be a real project not a "mock" one. Here are two newsletters for groups I'm involved with: Moraine Sailing Club and Evergreen Conservancy. Usually a newsletter is 4-12 pages; it speaks to members of an organization or a select group interested in a certain topic. Most notices are "timely" but some content may have to do with explaining what the organization is about, or inviting participation in something. What topics interest you? Do you participate in some group that could use a newsletter? When you have several ideas, compose a post and publish to your blog. A fall-back position would be to identify a sub-group at IUP and create a print newsletter for them using some of the web content at IUP.edu.